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February 28, 2012
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The dead are lucky
they cannot feel that
dull ache of pain,
that consumes you
burns you
leaving you dead
on the inside.

The dead are lucky
to have six feet of dirt
to numb them
like a shot of anesthesia

The dead are lucky
to have shed earthly pain
like a tattered cloak

The dead are lucky
Comments are great. Thanks for reading.
deathlove919 Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
lovely and true
LaClef-a-Verite Mar 6, 2012  Student Writer
This poem has a very somber and sarcastic feel to it. I like it! This is the first time, in a long while, that I have come across something like this!

As you have stated many times in your poem, the dead are lucky. I am sure that everyone has wished, at one point, that they were dead. They don't have to experience the heartaches, the dullness, and the struggle of life.

I have read short stories and poems that promote the same message, but I think that yours was the most blunt I have seen. Blunt is good. Blunt is good for some people, but then there are others who might feel offended by the message you are spreading. Not to worry, though. That's how it is in the life of a writer. Believe me, I know. ;)

There are few to very little grammatical errors and I praise you for that.

I must admit, this poem makes me have some second thoughts about my life. But it also resonates a strong message for others, me included: that even though life is a pain, there are things we should be happy about: friends, etc. (Meh, this sounds like the optimistic part of me. :P)

And, overall, you have done a good job! :)

Thank you. I am glad to see that you enjoyed this poem.
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